A
I asked my father
I said, Father,
I am hungry
He gave me a stone.
I asked my father
I said , Father ,
I am scared
He gave me a snake.
I asked my father
I said, Father,
I miss you
He gave me this Earth.
I asked my Father
I said, Father,
Change it all
But He gave me this song.
B.
I asked my father
I said, Father,
Take my hunger
He gave me a stone.
I asked my father
I said , Father ,
Take my fears all
He gave me a snake.
I asked my Father
I said, Father,
Take this sorrow
He show me a graveyard.
I asked my Father
I said , Father
Take my cowardness
He baptized me through fire.
I asked my Father,
I said, Father,
Take away this pain
He gave me this Earthly Cross.
I asked my Father
I said, Father,
Take my loneliness
He gave me this Name.
I asked my Father
I said, Father,
Please, Change it all !
But He gave me this song.
Cred ca prefer varianta A. Chiar daca varianta B e mai explicita si are si alte nuante, e si mai multa repetitie.
RăspundețiȘtergereps. Si mai prefer sa fiu aici, in teritoriul poetic, decat cel tehnologic(AI).
Da, Pai la sugestia ta am pus și prima varianta. Ai dreptate, e mai bruta :) mai intensa.
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